Attempt to shorten the introduction and make comemnts on shortening elsewhere

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@ -107,7 +107,7 @@ such as the MasterCard and VisaCard credit card schemes and computerized
bank transactions such as SWIFT. These systems enable mass surveillance
by both governments and private companies. Aspects of this surveillance
sometimes benefit society by providing information about tax evasion or
crimes like extortion. % TODO : anti-money laundering later?
crimes like extortion.
In particular, bribery and corruption are limited to elites who can
afford to escape the dragnet.
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@ -118,8 +118,9 @@ activity, and this limits the ability of the state to shape the
society. As bribery is virtually impossible to detect, corruption is
widespread and not limited to social elites.
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Zerocash~\cite{zerocash} is an example for translating an
anarchistic economy into the digital realm.
% SHORTER: Zerocash need not be mentioned so early?
% Zerocash~\cite{zerocash} is an example for translating an
% anarchistic economy into the digital realm.
This paper describes Taler, a simple and practical payment system for
a social-liberal society, which is underserved by
@ -310,6 +311,8 @@ would be to add partial spending and a form of Taler's refresh protocol.
At present, we feel these relatively new cryptographic techniques incur
unacceptable financial risks to the exchange, due to underdeveloped
implementation practice.
% SHORTER: Maybe some of the abbove could be thinned since
% they do not know much about Taler's refresh protcol yet.
In this vein, there are pure also zero-knoledge proof based schemes
like \cite{ST99}, and subsequently Zerocash~\cite{zerocash}, and maybe